rosewood WIP

Subject: rosewood WIP Fri May 31, 2013 12:31 am

Out of Character Information

Position: Member
Gender: Female
Contact Me: Rosefirefang@gmail.com
Date Joined: 5-30-2013
RP Characters: none

Character Information

Name: Rosewood
Age: 3
Gender: Female
Species: -The Eastern Timber Wolf (Canis lupus lycaon)
Pack: Roztok
Rank: alpha female or warrior

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Appearance: Rosewood is a small wolf with a petit build made for speed and agility. Her pelt is a light brown with hints of spots of grey and black. There is also patches of black on her ears that stretch down to her nose. there are black tiger marks that wrap around her ankles. Her long fur is usually kept neat and her ears are usually perked up. Her eyes are crystal blue and are centered on her face. Her muzzle is shorter than most.

Rosewood has always been high spirited since she was a pup. Her parents raised her to be respectful to all wolves and that they would respect her as well.she also knew that respect was to be earned not given. But it was when she left the pack at one year that she became more cautious and observant after many unpleasant eencounters, which makes her very keen to her surroundings. She often sniffs the air and keeps her ears on alert, not much surprises her now. She is very friendly and playful but has a serious side at times. She gets along with most wolves but has a quick temper if threatened. She prefers not to fight except when necessary but doesn't mind a little rough housing. She is also very observant and open-minded about new things she may come across. She often stays active not liking to stay in one place, and often roams around at night. She enjoys talking to others and meeting new wolves. Her calm personality allows her to think through things before she acts. She often prefers peace but keeps her body fit in case of the need of fighting. She is often described as gentle by nature yet fierce in battle.

She grew up in a meadow with her parents and sister. her parents where top warriors of the pack and kept the passtrasers away. But when she was 7 months old a strange male wolf came to the lush forest where they lived. He killed her sister and her parents. Rosewood had managed to escape by running off into the bushes before the warriors of her pack came and chased him away. The other members helped her for a long time and during those months she learned much on fighting and hunting. She had learned the territory well. She had been a scout and a warrior in the pack. Her high speed allowed her to chase off the trespassers who had come onto the packs territory without approval. When Rosewood was two years old she decided to leave the pack. she thought it was time to move on and create a pack or join another one. She then traveled on her own for a year traveling far with her fast pace and high sense of smell. Since she has left the pack she has explored many areas and meet different species of wolves. And only a few times did she come close to dying as she traveled through the high mountains. Her sense of smell allowing her to find food quickly along the rocky cliffs.

This member has posted the proper code words and they have been removed by Buck to ensure fair joining of future members.

Subject: Re: rosewood WIP Fri May 31, 2013 12:43 am

The personality is a bit short, 164 words as opposed to the required 200. You might want to take a look at your sentences, as they seem to be sort of short and choppy. This link HERE might help a little bit for fixing up those sentences and adding a bit more substance to the personality and the History.

Also, with the personality, you could probably add a bit more about her beliefs and values. For example, with one of my characters (an alpha female on another site) I explained how she valued loyalty and respect, and how she showed both to those who deserved it. You can also add a bit in about WHY she believes what she believes and WHY she behaves the way she behaves. It could be anything from how her parents raised her, to something like she got abused in the past or whatever.

For the History, you could explain what position her parents had in the pack, how she escaped, how the pack trained her to be a warrior...etc. You could also add on the reasoning behind her leaving her pack. You also mention that she came close to dying a few times, and you could lengthen the history and add some interest and detail by explaining how that happened and how she survived. It would also help with some of the reasoning behind why she behaves the way she does in her personality section.

Basically, you're writing a story, and your character is the main character. Their personality is the introduction, letting the reader know how your character THINKS and BEHAVES, and the history is the WHY behind it all and the background leading up to when she arrived at Incendio.

Subject: Re: rosewood WIP Fri May 31, 2013 9:05 pm

It looks good to me, I'm going to let buck take a look at it and give a final word but you can take the WIP off now.

Subject: Re: rosewood WIP Fri May 31, 2013 11:25 pm

The last thing is that the Alpha Female position in Roztok is not currently open. That rank will be given to the female that Ramses takes as a mate, if he does in the future.

But other than that, the bio is accepted. You can go ahead and post at the Roztok Border Lands to have your wolf accepted in-character.

Subject: Re: rosewood WIP Fri May 31, 2013 11:27 pm

thank you and funny thing was I actually meat to put beta not alpha.